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    damienangelico is offline Junior Member Newbie
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    Hello, I have been drawing a comic book for the past few weeks, and I need some fresh eyes. This is an original work by the way. Constructive criticism is strongly encouraged. I apologize for the details looking incomplete my friend conduit is working on it as a side project. I'm trying to go for a western/horror/action theme. WARNING very gory and violent, but that makes it more fun anyway.
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    http://www.megaupload.com/?d=ECE70KYR
    Hope you enjoy it!

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    Minow the Great is offline Junior Member Newbie
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    Right... Ok so I've read through your comic... Truth is, it is a bit complicated... I'm sorry that I'm gonna be pretty harsh. Don't take it personal, I'm just trying to help here... Right, so basically.

    1) Go for clearer panels. Specially the pencil pages, try to ink them to make everything clearer... Place some space between each panel so that the reader knows how things go. Also remember that we read from upper-left to lower-right, specially when it comes to text-balloons, make sure they're in the right order so that the readers know which one goes first, second and so on.

    2) Well, I'd mostly suggest you start each story with a panel that just shows the reader where things are taking place. Like, just a shot of the entrance of a bar, or a couple of panels, the first one with the city and the second one with the specific place. You really don't have to rush it into the story.

    3) Back to the speech balloons, my suggestion is to assign specific shapes for every situation, for example, round ballons for regular conversation, spiky ones for yelling or loud sounds, square ones for the narrator... Try drawing these shapes before scanning the pages, this might give you better results than adding them with the computer and it'll also make things more regular. Also, try to always make the text relatively horizontal... if it changes direction it might be hard to read.

    4) Well I can't complaint about the wide variety of perspectives, that's one good thing to say; keep that up because nothing's more boring than watching the same faces over and over again.

    5) You can never have too much practise when it comes to anatomy. True, you got the right bases. Still, it's good to keep on practising.

    Well that's all for now, I might re-read it a couple of times in the future and add something. To be honest the thoughts of the main character are very interesting and deep, and that's a complete plus. Seems like you're gonna create a cool story here.

    Anyway, read you soon. *goes away cursing his fake sense of duty*

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    damienangelico is offline Junior Member Newbie
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    Thank you so much, jesus its been forever since I have gotten some useful criticism. To be honest, I'm trying to tweak the dialogue since it really sucks. Thanks, I'll improve the pages and post any additional pages

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    Minow the Great is offline Junior Member Newbie
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    Quote Originally Posted by damienangelico View Post
    Thank you so much, jesus its been forever since I have gotten some useful criticism. To be honest, I'm trying to tweak the dialogue since it really sucks. Thanks, I'll improve the pages and post any additional pages
    No problems at all mate. As a comic author I know how important proper criticism is, so I thought I might as well give some advice... You know. It always comes in handy. Just keep on practising! Read you soon!

 

 

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