I thought you loved CPR. Am I wrong?
Yes. My heart was broken, but it's allright now. In fact it's a gas.
What does she recieve praise for such relatively enthusiastic creation, whereas I do not get even a semblance of the unbridled praise as she? Joking :P Or am I?
Dug up some old poems. I believe these are about 4~5 years old.
Drop by Drop
Even in the dead silence,
I can hear a splash on the ground
As a blood drop shatteres.
But my heart makes no sound.
My heart bleeds slowly
Drop by Drop...
Leaving no sound of a beat,
Only a red liquidy mark...
The world left me behind,
With no one to help me.
She closed me in darkness,
With no map to guide...
She looked at me
With a cold smile on her face.
And as I struggled for freedome,
Lifted it away from me,
As I reached out for the light...
The whole second stanza seems to be messed up wording wise. Any suggestions?
Meh. Infact this whole thing is messed up. =P Emo kid.
In the shadows I sit and wait,
For all the pain to fade away...
I wipe away my bloody tears,
And try to run from all my fears.
Again the second stanza's weird.. The placement of the "I" in the first line switches.
I've some more .. but they're waaay too bad to post. =P
I'll just take crits/comments/suggestions for these 3.
Go full out, be as harsh as you'd like ^___^