Claymore RPG Character check-up/approval thread

Name:
Nyskrte (Ness-kurt-ee)

Gender:
Female

Rank:
Former #16

Race:
Awakened One

Type:
Defensive

Alignment:
Chaotic Evil

Likes:
Playing with her prey, head games if they don't immediately start sweating under the collar. Nyskrte shows surprisingly mercy to Claymores, her natural enemies, who become down for the count when they confront her. Also enjoys walks at night when the skies are open and the stars are out.

Dislikes:
She despises weak yoma and will not hesitate to slay them. Anyone who mocks her appearance or attempts to manipulate her usually ends up dead. Basically, if she doesn't like something, she does her damnest to destroy it.

Personality:
Cold and calculating, two factors that have kept her alive till this day and kept others at bay. Avoids making oaths, pacts or agreements with anyone be they human or yoma. Nyskrte also has a very twisted imagination that occasionally shines through her actions, such as arranging corpses to spell out a message or in compromising situations.

Appearance:
http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/196/nyskrtezn2.jpg

Special Skills:
Withering Touch: This awakened one chooses not to consume the blood and guts of prey, she takes her fill of the liquids in their bloodstream instead by embracing them tightly. On her desire, physical contact with her skin can causes others to suffer debilitating pain and appear to age rapidly. However, this effect is only temporary should the contact break. When hungry, she loses the ability to control this and as a precaution measure cocoons herself in a suit of obsidian armor that can be likened to a fingernail, dead yet functional.

Wild Growth: Nyskrte can naturally regenerate wounds or lost limbs over time like most of her kind, or opt for a more spontaneous and abnormal result, often resulting in dangerously-shaped protrusions that can occasionally prove useful in combat. In order to use this skill, Nyskrte must be dismembered or gouged in some fashion and focus a considerable burst of yoki to the area she wishes the growth to sprout from. When not in the heat of battle, these growths can slowly be crafted into armor or weapons of steel-like strength.

History:
As far as Nyskrte was concerned, she had no parents, she just was. Either they abandoned her or were killed before she could construct memories, the first were of the orphanage and the strange spectacled man dressed in black who gathered her up in the night. Her world was shook violently as she suddenly found herself subjected to inhumane experiments and ruthless training regimes as a youth, no choice in the matter, no chance of escape. There were others like her in the same position and she could do nothing to help the many others that failed to meet her captor's expectations by either dying on the table, natural causes like illness or from exhaustion.

By the end of the condition, Nyskrte was broken and danced to the tune of her masters. This wouldn't be the case forever however as she'd managed to keep part of herself intact within the deep recesses of her mind, set to trigger when the time and conditions were right for it. She was a loyal servant for years, dispatching yoma in her region without setback and on occasion banding with other Claymore to take on more dangerous opponents. The feeling of the yoma grew within her body as did her rank, it craved for release and to feed, but the training she'd endured as a child kept it in its place for the time being.

Somehow, the organization caught on to this feeling deep within. The eye of her time reported her internal bouts and she began to receive the suicide missions she'd heard rumors about from other Claymore. This was the catalyst that brought back the hatred she'd felt as a child, before they'd broken her in.

Awakening intentionally to insult those who gave her no choice but to make a deal with the devil or die, she deserted the organization and refused to be a puppet to them any longer. An execution squad was quickly dispatched but didn't anticipate the awakened Nyskrte to manipulate the newly acquired levels of yoki so readily, the reasoning behind this was that she'd been bringing herself to the brink many times before in preparation and using her knowledge of those sent to execute her. Unwilling to allow herself to be killed by her old comrades, she fled from the #9, #14, #17 and #21 by luring them into a well-prepared trap that confused them long enough for Nyskrte to make good her escape.

She hasn't been sighted by the organization since as she carefully selects her meals, attacking mountaineers and other brave explorers ensuring no witnesses, then dumping their remains in deep lakes or impassable terrain that most wouldn't care to traverse. Nyskrte one day hopes to instigate the destruction of the organization that forced her and many other Claymores into this impure existence. To blend in with human civilization, she shortly after fleeing consumed and transformed into another woman's form, Cassidy, who'd lost her family in a yoma attack days before and never concieved that she'd become a mask for twisted abomination like Nyskrte.

Misc:
Nyskrte maintains the 6'0" human form of Cassidy even in battle as it serves her purposes, as the awakened form is large and easier to strike. She wields a claymore and large shield made of herself into battle, both of which she grafts from her body like the armor. Not breaking old habits, Nyskrte fighting style is much like that of any other Claymore except she also opts to use a shield, making use of the added strength awakening has provided her.

.:Name:.
Arc

.:Gender:.
Male

.:Rank:.
Yet to be decided

.:Race:.
Claymore

.:Type:.
Defensive

.:Alignment:.
Neutral

.: Likes :.
Perfecting his skills, gazing at the stars and being with the few claymores he considers friends. Getting things done quickly and efficiently.

.: Dislikes :.
Anything he considers an enemy no matter the race, him or his few friends being hurt, and being made to wait and making other wait. People who show off also annoy him too.

.:Personality:.
Despite having a face that seem perpetually pissed off Arc is a very calm calculating person. Likes to work with only a select few fellow claymores but, if it isn’t with any of them he would prefer going solo thought he will work with others. Preferring to get rid of any enemies quickly, with minimal risk to himself and others, he developed mid-range special skills.

.:Appearance:.
Couldn't really decide on appearance so, I will go with the description of a medium built man with stern face and the other usual claymore attributes.

.:Symbol:.
http://i238.photobucket.com/albums/f...g?t=1188714581

.:Special Skill:.
Phantom Spear: Arc with his strong desire of survival and fear of awakening, despite working under the organization, developed a sword like weapon based on mid range assaults and his skill devoloped from earlier techinques. Due to his sword thrust in combination with self made modifications to a weapon which looks like his own claymore however it actuall is a blade which include extend joints and a heavier then normal tip. These allow the sword to extend approximately 3 meters and also retract into a straight trajectory which seems almost invisible to naked eye hence the name Phantom Spear. The blade only extends due to linear direction for of Arc's thrusting or stabing motion, if any other motions like a slight twist of the wrist is included it will not extend or could even stay full extended. Thought Arc could use the sword fully extended, Arc avoids that in order to conceal the true length of the blade and avoid damaging this blade extension joints thought these can cut objects too they are brittle compared to main part of the sword which is only part out when the sword is concealed as a claymore. The amount the blade can extend can be varied by a timed wrist twisted thought for retraction only linear reaction will work. With a single thrust it has the power to pierce the average awaken being skin at the maximum reach of the blade. Although the sword has an extended reach it can work as well as a regular claymore when it isn't extended.

Rapid Pulse Strike: Arc original technique before using the modified sword. Can use with regular claymore, with the modified sword or another weapon of similar shape and size as a sword. Though with the modified sword you can not take advantage of the longer reach due to the speed which these thrust are accomplished, however piercing power of the attack is greater as well. There is added a bonus of a knockback ability, however this is only has any range gained when using at least 20% of his Yoma aura. The knockback ablity is created due to sonic booms made by the rapid piston like movments of blade with great force behind them. The weapon doesn't follow the same course and goes in a slightly random location in a general area of target normally within half a meter. This knockback ability only cause opponent to feel the force equivlent to being run into by an average human within 2 meter in front of the stiking series of thrusts from the claymore and goes down to a gust of wind after the sonicboom travelling 6 meter. This special skill can only be used with thrust in front or on the side in which Arc is wielding his weapon. Also this strike may be able to pierce a awakenbeing skin, however it will only weaken it due to the double edged sonicboom created by this attack pushing the target back, unless the target is massive enough that it won't be pushed back by the sonicbooms. It also very tiring for the arm using this attack and can only maintained no more then 1 minute bursts after which Arc arm is pretty much useless for 5 minutes. This move due to amount of Yoma aura used and the drawback of only being able to uses this move for 1 minute a move that can only be used in only certain situations. This move is normally used by Arc as shield to deflect mulitudes of attacks, attacks that he can't dodge and would be critical if they hit, and as a way of pushing back and/or temporary distract enemies to escape. Thought if forced to used when cornered weaking the opponent in bid to set up a killing blow.


.:History:.
Arc was orphaned at a young age of 4 due to a big fire in the small village of Des on the west side of the continent. It seems that they died in there sleep. The fire caused by a claymore fight with Yoma. This is the result from a lamp being knocked over in right into some bushes next to the house. Through these combinations of events many of the kids of this village were orphaned. After this the village was hit by hard times due to the high fee charged by the organization and the village was forced to sell the orphaned children to slavers and many of the young orphaned children were sold to the organization to be raised as claymores. Part of the last generation of male claymores his main objective is to avoid dying or awakening. This is mainly due to an incident where one of the few claymores he consider friend had awakened. This friend was of the same generation as Arc and was named Colt. During a hunt for multiple Yomas; Arc with three fellow claymores which including Arc’s friend Colt of course. Colt was put into a difficult situation due to trying to show off his skills and ended up critically injured. Colt attemped to use Yoma aura to heal woundes during battle. This resulted in Colt releasing too much of his Yoma aura causing himself to awaken. After killing all the Yomas surrounding him, he started targeting his former comrades. Arc and his remaining teammate’s manage to kill Colt however another comrade die in this battle with his former friend. This resulted in Arc desire to avoid using Yoma aura as much as possible. Hence the development of Phantom Spear to allow him to fight in a way that avoids using Yoma aura and lower risk of being in danger.

.:Misc:
Arc originally special skill called Rapid Pulse Strike which is a shorter range attack with mid range effects that however relied on Yoma Aura. Using only technique aspect of this move made a weapon that take advantage of this skills to form a new technique called Phantom Spear that requires no Yoma Aura to use. Thought it seems a offensive technique at first; the way Arc uses it is mostly as a shield which strikes key points to disperse attacks. Arc devoloped the orignal skill with the help from his claymore friend Colt. Also pretty much Arc seems to be sent on many difficult mission as of late. This seem to be the way the organizations attempts to remove male claymores at present rather then simply removing them. The organizations attempts to kill Arc through mission is too apparent yet Arc except this as part of the situation for the moment. Also the reason for this type of weapon and special skill is due to the character history of avoiding using yoma aura as much as possible and wanting to avoid being hurt it just suit this character better.

If Elcura has already approved your characters, your in.

.:Name:.
Stella

.:Gender:.
Female

.:Rank:.
Yet to be decided

.:Race:.
Claymore

.:Type:.
Offensive

.:Alignment:.
Neutral

.: Likes :.
Drinking and getting drunk. Candy. Humans.

.: Dislikes :.
Yoma. Fighting in towns or villages. Defensive types. She believes defensive types care more about their own lives than protecting the lives of humans.

.:Personality:.
Serious, loyal and proud. Stella is loyal to the organization for giving her the ability to protect humans. She doesn't hesitate to defend the organization's honor against anyone, even fellow claymores. Stella prefers to work in small groups to reduce the chances of failure on missions. Although she causes the most trouble when around other claymores, especially defensive types. She developed her abilities to be able to protect others even at the cost of her own body.

.:Appearance:.
http://img65.imageshack.us/img65/9214/icestareqx8.jpg

.:Special Skills:.

Stellar Chain: This technique allows Stella to extend her limbs to a long distance(3meters). She does this by focusing her yoki into a single body part instead of through out her entire body. With full concentration on a single limb she can easily use the yoma ability to extend any part of herself(Arm, leg, finger, tounge). The initial extension of a limb appears as a blur to claymore eyes. The technique loses speed after every repeated use after being used 6 times. A limb can be held in it's extended form for a short period of time before it begins to awaken.


.:History:.
Stella was working as a bartender in her family's bar. Due to Yoma attacks her village became like a ghost town. The village was avoided by outsiders and was unable to afford the cost of a claymore. Soon the village had become a nest for Yoma. They took the women in the village and used them to lure men. Stella was one of the young women tortured and used to gather the Yoma's “food”. To gain greater control of the village, all human males were killed and replaced by Yoma. Stella's younger brother, the only male left, carried himself as a girl until he had the opportunity to leave and find help. After a few days had past, a Yoma returned using her brother's body as a disguise. As punishment, the Yoma used her brother's form to rape Stella and made her watch other Yoma devour the girls who had become “useless” to them. Eventually a nearby town called for a claymore to go into the village because a Yoma attacking a young boy had been spotted not to far from them. As far as Stella knew, the organization had sent the claymore out of concern and she vowed to repay them. After all the Yoma had been slain a man dressed in black came through to collect the girls who were left...

.:Misc:
Stella uses a customized claymore uniform to allow her ability to extend her limbs without ripping her clothes.

.:Symbol:.
http://img399.imageshack.us/img399/7048/symbolhb6.jpg

For further adjustments.

.:Name:.
Alerian Kaiserkreuz

.:Gender:.
Male

.:Rank:.
To be determined by the GM

.:Race:.
Claymore

.:Type:.
Offensive

.:Alignment:.
Neutral Good

.: Likes :.
Training to refine combat techniques and skill, Resting in tranquil places, and Reading Books.

.: Dislikes :.
Yoma, Indecisiveness, and Vulgar Persons

.:Personality:.
Other think that Alerian is a snob or a person you can’t get along with because he’s serious, silent, reserved and emits a don’t bother me presence but in reality he’s a nice, kind person, and always analyze things first before action.

.:Appearance:.
Eye Color: Purple(When still human), Hair Color: Lightblond to Silverywhite(When still human), Height 5’ 11”, Slender Built than average person, Weight 135 pounds, Possess innate beauty and easy gracefulness, viewed as both wondrous and haughty by other, Has a long Hair that is waist level and tied in the neck area and waist area and the left bangs cover the left face and tied in the chest area.

.:Insignia:.
http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b1...an/house15.jpg

.:Special Skill:.
Discern Yoki: same as yoki reading ability that enable you to read targets/targets yoki like location of target/targets in area and gauging strength of target/targets to know the missions success rate.

Skill derived from Discern Yoki:
Find Weakness: By discerning target/targets yoki you can see the locations of target/targets susceptible parts and attack it with dire precision dealing critical or deadly damage to your opponent.

Quote: “If you know both yourself and your enemy, you will come out of one hundred battles with one hundred victories.”

Alerian: Since male claymores are more susceptible in awakening, Then I must not misuse my yoki and attack my opponent with wit.

(Tempest Blitz: is the point of calm within a whirling barrier of deadly blades. By focusing yoki to empower Alerian’s attack he can simulate a tornado like barrier that cuts any opponent that are near him and protects him from opponents attack. Not yet available on current level based on Elcura's suggetion)

Quote: “The ultimate offense is defense.”

.:History:.
Family Kaiserkreuz was a noble house which boasts it’s skill in swordsmanship and archery that they are employed by other noble houses form other towns as personal bodyguards and generals as for Alerian being born in this family his childhood is like not like that of any normal child at a young age of 8 children of Kaiserkreuz are trained in reading and writing, etiquette and decorum, and in swordsmanship and archery. His father personally trains him in swordsmanship while his mother personally trains him in archery. When he was at the age of eleven he is already good in his combat skill but a pack of yoma entered the town they control that is causing chaos and turmoil in their that they need to hire a claymore no matter what the price is, some of the citizens left the town for their safety. One night the yomas managed to enter Kaiserkreuz estate killing some of the on duty guards and sounding the alarm. His parents knowing what is the meaning of the alarm rushes to hide Alerian for safety in the secret treasury room hidden under the estates library. Some of the guards run away in panic and fear while others fought. His parent’s and family members leading the guards in the fight against the monsters died also that night. Two day later the claymore they hired came the town is empty no people most already fled for safety and searched and hunted down the yomas and waited for the black robe man in the Kaiserkreuz estate.

Male Claymore: Seem that there is no one left to pay you the fees for the yoma extermination.
Man in Black Robe: Don’t worry since this is the estate who ask for our service surely they have a treasury room and we will have our payment there.

While searching the manor, Man in Black Robes: I have heard that this family is one of the best in weapon combat. I am surprised than they managed to kill three yomas. Pointing at the headless bodies of yomas pierced heavy by lances and arrows.

They have found the secret passage in the library that leads to the treasury and finds the scared young boy. Due to extreme fear and anger Alerian tries to attack the man in black robe with the families heirloom saber stored in the treasury. The Male Claymore knocks the child unconscious.
Man in Black Robes: Almost had my neck slit.
Male Claymore: My apologies I underestimated him the child is good in swordsmanship.
Man in Black Robes: Well have our payment almost a hundred times than the original fee.
Male Claymore: What about the child?
Man in Black Robes: Well we’ll take him with us since he is the only survivor of this family he has no where to go a child can not live alone in this world and I have taken interest in him, he might be a good material since it that he is already good in swordsmanship at a young age.

When Alerian regains consciousness the Man in Black Robe told him that he is the only survivor of his family and tell him that yoma had killed his family and say do you want become strong and avenge your family. Since Alerian is still angry about what happened answers yes. Then come with me and we will take you in the man said. Alerian follows the man without hesitation since there no where else for him to go.

.:Misc:.
Alerian always carry two secondary weapon which he uses instead of his claymore a Schweizersäbel and a custom made Composite Longbow that only Claymores can use. Kills yoma quick and pain less as possible and when he detects one that is near his area kills it first no questions ask. He only uses his claymore when needed

:Name:
Ram Grath

:Gender:
Male

:Rank:
For gm to decide

:Race:
Claymore

:Type:
Offensive

:Alignment:
neutral

: Likes :
Fighting, water

: Dislikes :.
Yoma and socialising

:Personality:
Quiet to many and unwilling to open up to others, Ram enjoys being challenged.
:Appearance:
http://i135.photobucket.com/albums/q...1/Claymore.jpg


:Special Skills:
Frenzied Fists: If he uses a high amount of yoki in his arms they get tougher and hard to cut. His hands become stronger and able to punch through dense materials without too much pain.

:History:
Born in a small fishing village, his parents having died of disease years ago, his uncle raised him. Having little knowledge of the outside world he lived peacefully and knew little of claymore or yoma At the age of 6 his uncle went to a nearby city to sell fish unknown to anyone a yoma killed him on the way and replaced him and when he came back people began to vanish from the small village. After several weeks the village elder secretly called for a claymore to come and find the yoma, the claymore arrived soon after and didnt take long to confront the yoma which quickly tried to flee taking Ram with it. The claymore caught up to the monster and fighting it with Ram left sobbing nearby. Ram wandered back to the village where the hut that had been his home for 6 years lay empty, his aunt and her child having left in fear of being blamed for the yoma. He sat among the ruins for a while until a gang of slave traders picked him up and carried him away to the east.

.:Misc: Ram sometime fights with his fists rather then his claymore.

editted thanks for feed back i see your point about the histroy :) edited

Disapproved for several reasons. Claymores are known only to take up requests and often they do not travel with anyone else other than by themselves. It also seems highly unusual for a Claymore to run away from 3 low class yomas and from the looks of it he is a renegade who deserted the organization which would imply he or she is pretty confident at their own survival rate against the organization's prosecuters. The history seems to lack logic and reasoning as well as a clear reason why a recruiter was waiting for him outside the city walls and decided to talk to you specifically to follow him. It also seems like he is somewhat older or about the same age as Zaki? (Raki's brother) which is a big age for the organization to try anything funny as turning him into a Claymore. Often than not they seem to prefer using children as their experiment than half adolescent teens. Without checking if his father is alive or dead yet going off to become a Claymore doesn't seem like anyone with a common sense would do. There is plenty room for improvement and I'll leave it as disapproved for now. In regards to if you can still join, I'll discuss this with the other mod and reach a conclusion.

~off for editing~

For reader's sake please don't use bright colours it just looks so much more annoying.

Quote:

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Blood Type: ~ ¼ human ¼ human ½ youma

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I don't see what you're trying to say. Doesn't that add up as half human half yoma?

So far... I know this is brutal but I have to say it, this reminds me of Chi from Chobits than a possible Claymore character. Her personality doesn't seem like the type of person who endured extreme torture like trainings the Organization throws at the little girls and her mental state seems more like a sweet little princess. You have to remember these girls undergo both great physical pain from the arduous trainings (They need to, otherwise they won't be able to slay a yoma let alone keep themselves alive) and the mental breakdowns many of them could have suffered (Considering most are war orphans or slaves sold to the Eastern Continent I'm sure young people would break down and cry alot, missing their parents, family, life as a normal child, etc). Having lost everyone and everything and becoming a half monster I'm not sure if I like the personality of your character at the moment.

Her weakness also seems to stray too far away from what we accept as a Claymore. Claymores are trained very well, they are trained to act and decieve if that will help them in their mission. For such creatures I think they would also need to be trained to never trust anyone unless they've earned the trust. Yomas are deceptive creatures and the way you're character's weakness is right now, if one of them told you he's not evil and stabs you in the back its game over. Rethink about this and use more common sense into the writing. Remember who you are, you are not a normal human being, you Are a Claymore. Organization's top warriors, survivor of the massacre/graduation ceremony, ultimate killing machine stronger than the full yomas themselves.

While I have no objection with you trying to make a girly character like Chi (Sorry about the continued comparison but it seems more or less like the best thing to compare it with), but there is a limit on what I can accept knowing how difficult it is to pass the test to graduate as a Claymore. With Personality and Weakness like Catherine's I would be surprised she made it amongst the top with the other trainees amongst the 200 trainees reduced to 12 or less survivors.

I haven't read the history yet but according to the people who had their's reviewed already I seem to be the harshest when it comes to a Claymore's history. I hope you are prepared when you edit it in.

1/4 1/4 because it her and what she think as her sis.
what i'm trying to propose is that its a broken soul link*although there was never train* its something a twin normally have.

it seems i need to make catherine more colder. i do not want to make someone who is more overpowering. to cope with the mental issue, think of it as 2 minds instead of 1.

i'll try to hand up history and the change after i do my advertisment homework